Byron H @ Greymouth High School

WALT: Use 2 - 3 Paragraphs WALT: Show Not Tell As the night grew darker and the clouds disappeared, two brothers (Byron and Tristan) were out sleeping in the backyard. They were playing spotlight when they heard a noise up in the bush. They listen again to see if it would get louder. It did. They grabbed a Flashlight and started to chase it up the hill. They came to a dead end and then thought about where could it of gone.They went back down and cleaned themselves and then fell asleep. The next night they chucked some bread out and hid in the tent. When they heard the bush rattle again they stayed quiet as possible so they wouldn't scare it away. When they heard it eating the bread they shone the light on it. “IT”S A KIWI.” Byron whispered They quickly grabbed it by it’s legs but when they tried to grab the other leg they found out that it was missing it’s second leg. Byron and Tristan stayed up all night feeding it bread and looking after it. When the sun c...

Marshmallows WALT: Show Not Tell WALT: Use More Characters In My story It was a dark and spooky Friday night . There were no stars in the sky and you couldn't see a thing.the trees were swaying side to side for a while and then it stopped. We slowly crept outside so there was no noise. We started the fire and it was going great. Dad and my brother needed the toilet so it was just me by the fire on my own. “Crick, Crack” The bushes were shaking and then when I looked back at my marshmallows they were gone. I put more marshmallows on and then cooked them. I stared at the bush to see if anything was there and then I felt a tug and then my stick was gone. I Grabbed the bag of marshmallows and ran. Something was chasing me and then it was gone. I looked back in front of me and it was there. “Ahhh” I ran back to the fire to see what it was  and when its face went into the light I say what it was. IT WAS A VELOCIRAPTOR IN MY BACKYARD!!! I dropped the bag of marshmallows ...

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