Hanging Bed description

By Anonymous -

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I was walking in the forest and my eyes opened wide. Something was in the trees.It started to sway side to side, back and forward over and over again. It looked so comfortable. I didn’t stop staring at it until I saw a ladder that looked like it lead up to it. I climbed up it and there were Pillows on it with thick black blankets. There was a big furry thing on it and it had its hands out like it wanted to cuddle me.

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