Writing Shed

By Anonymous -
Description about the shed:
  1. Shape: The shape is like a shed shape.
  1. Doing: Nothing.
  1. Number: 70 year old shed that no one has been in for years.
  2. Size: The Size is 10 feet high.
  1. Position: In the middle of nowhere in fog.
  1. Colour: The Colour of the shed is rusty brown and moldy.
  1. Texture: The shed is hard and rusty.
Bang the sound of the gun firing thump the deer smashes into the ground the soft skin deer gulping his last breath wining to its calf Run Run as fast as you can to your father those dirty humans think they can just take our life for fun and food don't they have a SUPER MARKET I will miss you my child I want you to love your father as long as live.
Narrative (story about the fog):

One ordinary night when there were no stars a mysterious mist started to come over my house and headed towards the town, But what they didn’t know was that the mist was no ordinary thing to hit their town. The mist escaped a highly toxic wasteland that no one has been to in years. The mysterious mist keeped on going towards the town. In the morning when the sun came up the mist came to a stop like a force field is in front of it. That midday a kid took his dog for a walked up the hill to look at the mist and they never returned.The police and other people went on a search party to find the kid and the dog but when they got to the top of the hill all they found was dog bones. They heard a scream from the mist and it then the police called the S.W.A.T to come and help.
“HELP ME, AHHHH!!!” The girl screamed
The S.W.A.T quickly came with their Titanium cars through the fog and they stopped at a dear that was starting to melt because of the fog. They finally figured out that the fog was deadly because 1 They saw a dear melting and 2 is because the owner of the fog phoned them just then. Then they stopped at a shed where they heard more screaming.
“HELP ME, AHHHH!!!” Someone screamed from inside

The S.W.A.T jumped into their Titanium suits so they wouldn't die. When they got into the shed they found a girl with melting legs on top of a bunk bed with sheets wrapped around her. The Titanium covered S.W.A.T team took her into the car and drove off out the fog but just before they got out the tires blow up and the car stopped. They put the girl into a suit and carried her out. Her mother was so happy that she could see her little girl again. The girl had to go to Hospital and the only way she could stay alive was that she wasn't aloud to walk anymore and she had to use a wheelchair to get around. The fog got sucked up through a big tube into a giant container and it could not get out. they took it to space and through it into a different universe so it would never ever come back and hurt anyone again.

Comments

  1. Anonymous18 September 2014 at 08:11

    Hi Byron. A pretty gruesome story. Must be giving you nightmares. Love Godparent.

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